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your arms form a barrier, blocking out all sound,
all thoughts,

there is nothing but you.

you.

you are the only thing that
can make a buzzing fan
sound like a butterfly;
a creaking house
like a lullaby.

moaning wind and soft footsteps,
    tickings of clocks, downstairs.

but you made it feel like a soft cocoon;
a weightless wall of something golden:


                                                       silence.


                             "silence is good in its absolution,"
                             is what you said to me once.
                             i understand what you meant now-

it's like floating, it's like flying,
but without the adrenaline rush.
it's like hoping, it's like wishing,
only this
            gave me everything i wished for.


silence is like diamonds in the rough:
crystal clear;
like water you can't feel;
more precious and hard to come by
   than all the world's most sought-for treasures-

                             it's like you.


                                                          it made me think of dreaming- like you're only half there.
                                                          i felt as if i could burst with energy or fall asleep
                             all at the same time,




                                                                                       and i wish-
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i wish i could have fallen asleep in your arms; there is really no place i would rather be.



blue is coming soon.


xx

i am still in shock--a daily deviation?! you have got to be kidding me! thank you SO much! to everyone who faves/comments/watches and of course to ^LadyLincoln for featuring me. please read my journal that discusses my "deal" with all you guys: [link]

Daily Deviation

Given 2009-05-18

~SubstituteSadist's poem the science of silence vast appeal lies not only in the flow of the words, but also in the wonderful meaning behind it. (Featured by ^LadyLincoln)

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:iconmoonprincessartemis:
That's just amazing.. *romantic sigh* As always fantastic!"it's like floating, it's like flying,but without the adrenaline rush." *shiver* I LOVE that line...:heart:
:iconxanderstrike:
I love you.

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I take pictures.
:iconsubstitutesadist:
did i tell you this would be amazing or did i tell you this would be amazing?


(i love you too.:heart:)


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"I’m not a writer—I just have an unhealthy obsession with words."
:iconsubstitutesadist:
aww, thank you!! :blush:
i'm really glad you like it.(:


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"I’m not a writer—I just have an unhealthy obsession with words."
:iconxanderstrike:
You told me it would be amazing, and you made it so :heart:

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I take pictures.
:iconsubstitutesadist:
no, my dear,
you did.:heart:


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"I’m not a writer—I just have an unhealthy obsession with words."
:iconvethivorel:
First, the negative: I think that your choice of spacing a little too dramatic.

Now, the positive: You choice of words is astounding. You really do know how to express yourself very well.

My favorite line is "silence is like diamonds in the rough". It is wonderful that you can take such an existential concept and make it fit the norm.

I hope that your continued growth as an artist and poet is to remain available for my perusal here at dA.

The love that the two of you seem to have is beautiful, and I wish that I could say that I was in a similar situation....

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If silence is golden, then give me my damn gold!!!! - Vethivorel

If looking back hurts you, and looking forward scares you, then look beside you and I'll always be here to stand beside you. - unknown
:iconsubstitutesadist:
hrm. i think you might be right about that spacing thing. i knew something seemed a little off about this one, maybe that's it. ah well.


awh, thank you! and of course. even if i do become a published author, i would still love to keep posting here on DA. you guys are what inspires me daily! and if i do make it, it's all you guys' support that made it possible.

i'm not goin' anywhere. (:


i'm sure you'll find your some one. i know you've heard this a thousand times before, but i hope the repetition hasn't dulled its meaning:
it takes time. just keep your eyes wide open.

:hug:


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"I’m not a writer—I just have an unhealthy obsession with words."
:iconx-x-sakura-x-x:
fantastic piece! truly wonderful as your oetry always is <3 but i didn't like it because it made me think of dying. i'm not sure why. i think at the beginning it painted a picture of a dereict house and, of course, wit your lover, but its the closest scenario to a death in a movie.
i' petrfied of death ._.


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:iconalapip:
Mallori,

your embrace of silence
is the acceptance of deep thought.
too many fear to be alone in their heads
for comtemplation of life.
from your inner self comes your
beautiful feelings and words.
from your mind come your answers.

i'll agree that sometimes the physical
patterns you make with your lines do
detract from what you're saying. your
words do not need nor deserve to be
shadowed by any distraction.

this poem is one of your best. notice
that the better poets on this site,
(i do not include myself), don't generally
"get fancy", but keep the reader's focus
on the words.

BTW, Desiderata would impress you
if you've never read it. [link]

:heart:
pip

pip

--
when a man refers to the woman,
[who chose him], as his better half,
for once, he tells the truth. - llp - nov'09

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