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hello, goodbye. by *SubstituteSadist:iconSubstituteSadist:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Free & Blank Verse


hello boy with the bittersweet smile.
will you join me in my woes?
hello world with a sour aftertaste.
will you help me face my foes?

                                                     goodbye awkwardness and doubt.
                                                     i no longer need you.
                                                     goodbye lonely nights and tears.
                                                     i no longer feed you.



                           i was drowning
                      for so long,
                 it seems i've
            forgotten how
       to breathe.



but your kiss of life sucked the water from my mouth,
and my eyes have been opened
wider than they've ever been.
show me the starlight, show me the sunbeams. i can
really
see them now.
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Author's Comments

this actually WASN'T inspired by hellogoodbye. O___o

death cab is all i can listen to lately, besides your breathing. it's awfully catchy. :heart:

:icondonotuseplz::iconmyartplz:

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~orange-sheep Apr 28, 2009, 11:39:29 AM
love death cab.

that was really beautiful, I loved the way you separated the ideas but still blurred them together.

--
fin.

(swim swim little fishy)
:iconsubstitutesadist:
*SubstituteSadist Apr 28, 2009, 11:57:33 AM
thank you oh so very much.:heart:
means a lot to me.(:

death cab = love.

--
"I’m not a writer—I just have an unhealthy obsession with words."
:iconkrish-x:
~krish-x Apr 25, 2009, 10:45:40 AM
i love deathcab.
i love this.

:heart:

--
Dreams can come true, but never fantasies, if you nurture a fantasy, it'll most likely get broken.
:iconsubstitutesadist:
*SubstituteSadist Apr 25, 2009, 1:00:33 PM
and i love YOU! :heart:

--
"I’m not a writer—I just have an unhealthy obsession with words."
:iconxhigherxnowx:
~xHigherxNowx Apr 25, 2009, 9:46:48 AM
This sounds like an amazing song, too.

--
... in Murdoc's pants.

You know you want to.
:iconsubstitutesadist:
*SubstituteSadist Apr 25, 2009, 10:56:36 AM
nawww, this would suck as a song. xD

--
"I’m not a writer—I just have an unhealthy obsession with words."
:iconxhigherxnowx:
~xHigherxNowx Apr 25, 2009, 10:59:15 AM
Still amazing, though. Dx

--
... in Murdoc's pants.

You know you want to.
:iconsubstitutesadist:
*SubstituteSadist Apr 25, 2009, 1:01:08 PM
lol, thank you.

--
"I’m not a writer—I just have an unhealthy obsession with words."
:iconxhigherxnowx:
~xHigherxNowx Apr 25, 2009, 2:25:11 PM
It's what I'm here for.

--
... in Murdoc's pants.

You know you want to.
:iconsubstitutesadist:
*SubstituteSadist Apr 25, 2009, 5:49:03 PM
pssshhh. you're here to be AWESOME, not to tell me (falsely) that i'm awesome.

--
"I’m not a writer—I just have an unhealthy obsession with words."
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